tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post919577719325863837..comments2024-02-14T15:27:59.577-05:00Comments on Bukowski's Basement: GODDESS OR GUTTERSNIPE? (flash fiction)Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11413377601369107260noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-23557427117806957422010-07-25T02:29:36.865-04:002010-07-25T02:29:36.865-04:00Well damn, you are good.Well damn, you are good.RaShelle Workmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582252557500502186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-58809891389633587832010-07-20T12:44:41.165-04:002010-07-20T12:44:41.165-04:00Awesome dialogue! "get a little stink on your...Awesome dialogue! "get a little stink on your down-low." is a great phrase and "she smelled like a vacation" really made me laugh. I feel for that poor guy.Mark Kerstetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307987573435067415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-37476726585948659712010-07-19T12:44:07.933-04:002010-07-19T12:44:07.933-04:00great stuff. man, you should see the chicks in th...great stuff. man, you should see the chicks in the bar i go to...all none of them.John Grochalskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13150630637644393375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-3033587084044057832010-07-18T10:50:45.997-04:002010-07-18T10:50:45.997-04:00Sometimes getting what we want is a real pain in t...Sometimes getting what we want is a real pain in the ass. The ironies! <br /><br />I loved this line<br /><br />"I shook her hand. It was smoothe and she smelled like a vacation." Mmmm... life is in the yummy details.<br /><br />ps On an off note, I can't agree more about hi def tvs or photos. I like the old cameras, where the lightening was just a tad off, and the picture just a bit fuzzy. Or even old black and white pictures (or movies).It was real. I really don't care to see every pore on a person's skin or that white fake glow of bleached teeth just speaks of unauthenticity. Okay- rant over.<br /><br />Great work as always, Ant!Jodi MacArthurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13373591664178281529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-73146380953828611262010-07-17T23:19:47.719-04:002010-07-17T23:19:47.719-04:00Men! Gods or gudgeons? (Ha! Bet you had to look ...Men! Gods or gudgeons? (Ha! Bet you had to look it up, just like I had to look up "guttersnipe.")<br /><br />As always, Anthony, I greatly enjoyed your story.Madam Zhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00136166772469538966noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-8064149630073650012010-07-17T11:34:42.228-04:002010-07-17T11:34:42.228-04:00Your writing voice is gritty. I like it. :)
B...Your writing voice is gritty. I like it. :) <br /><br />Before your MC even commented on Charlie, I knew she was a woman from the way you phrased her dialogue and her reaction. Nicely written!<br /><br />CDCecilia Dominichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12799727636246434837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-4111574047905274642010-07-17T10:37:27.564-04:002010-07-17T10:37:27.564-04:00I'm with Alan, that line is fantastic. And as ...I'm with Alan, that line is fantastic. And as usual, you capture modern life in such a classic voice.Lou Freshwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08849342766852653969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-3307433695477840512010-07-17T00:41:57.218-04:002010-07-17T00:41:57.218-04:00I sorta got stuck on "stink on your low down&...I sorta got stuck on "stink on your low down"... let's just say good thing I wasn't drinking a beverage cause liquid would definitely been shooting out my nose.<br /><br />Voice, pacing, imagery--it always works. There's slice of life, then there's Ant and Slice of Real Life.<br /><br />Stay cool.pegjethttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-79220073132664487842010-07-16T17:10:07.216-04:002010-07-16T17:10:07.216-04:00As usual, a the character has perfect voice, sir. ...As usual, a the character has perfect voice, sir. I liked this line the best: "I shook her hand. It was smoothe and she smelled like a vacation." He'd better give his head a shake and move in for the kill...Alan W. Davidsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17067022519729701245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-26626954742879721862010-07-16T15:23:43.062-04:002010-07-16T15:23:43.062-04:00Great dialogue, Ant! Guttersnipe...I agree with La...Great dialogue, Ant! Guttersnipe...I agree with Laurita, underused word.Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-2244450765205144902010-07-16T14:18:00.062-04:002010-07-16T14:18:00.062-04:00"Seriously, Ralph, what's a frikkin' ..."Seriously, Ralph, what's a frikkin' guttersnipe?"<br /><br />"99% of all women. Duh."<br /><br />Then he was flayed alive!John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-73669882313600361792010-07-16T13:01:43.216-04:002010-07-16T13:01:43.216-04:00Your characters always have punch, Anthony.
I...Your characters always have punch, Anthony. <br /><br />I've always been irritated by female sportscasters...like, cheerleaders, but worse - however, female mechanics are the bomb.EChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09359075647077590741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-75062093168086606472010-07-16T12:53:16.494-04:002010-07-16T12:53:16.494-04:00Guttersnipe. Now there's a word I haven't ...Guttersnipe. Now there's a word I haven't heard in a while. Underused in my opinion.<br /><br />Great dialogue, as always.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-82009663681060499432010-07-16T10:23:55.085-04:002010-07-16T10:23:55.085-04:00You define noir. And you are brilliant at dialogue...You define noir. And you are brilliant at dialogue. Hear me? <br /><br />Who needs hi-def? I do, I can't see a gd thing. Peace...Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-34602845605296549032010-07-16T07:06:09.651-04:002010-07-16T07:06:09.651-04:00Everyone in their place, hey. Heh.Everyone in their place, hey. Heh.Jenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01425418200940737247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-42217855619592275022010-07-16T06:47:41.083-04:002010-07-16T06:47:41.083-04:00*shaking my head*
Don't be showing Dave that p...*shaking my head*<br />Don't be showing Dave that pix of the goddess checking the plugs - he'll have her up in his bay in no time.<br />Great story, Anthony. Blue collar macho fun.Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-32579669461187275882010-07-16T06:33:22.868-04:002010-07-16T06:33:22.868-04:00same way I feel about ann coulter - the minute she...same way I feel about ann coulter - the minute she opens her mouth I wannna punch her out..good spin ant..Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-91786901177650250522010-07-16T03:37:25.070-04:002010-07-16T03:37:25.070-04:00I agree - your dialogue is always brilliantly writ...I agree - your dialogue is always brilliantly written Anthony. Great, fun story. I love the line "...smelled like a vacation." Those few words paint such a vivid picutre I could smell the cocount. <br /><br />Second "serves him right" story I read this morning. Thanks for the laughs!Deanna Schrayerhttp://www.theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-12685642517680726942010-07-16T02:23:13.301-04:002010-07-16T02:23:13.301-04:00The dialog here is awesome. Very smooth transition...The dialog here is awesome. Very smooth transition from one scene to another too. Believable characters all around. Just a great job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-56849644013936672052010-07-16T02:09:30.754-04:002010-07-16T02:09:30.754-04:00You do know the voice of the working man... I hope...You do know the voice of the working man... I hope he survives.Pamila Paynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14398900249578356483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-36947369422907785342010-07-16T01:38:27.402-04:002010-07-16T01:38:27.402-04:00Anthony ... you do spin a great story ... you brin...Anthony ... you do spin a great story ... you bring an incredible level of believability to everything you write.Tesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01163983155049480451noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-82708095228749009802010-07-16T00:58:41.671-04:002010-07-16T00:58:41.671-04:00Hehehe, you men are all the same. :)
Just kidding...Hehehe, you men are all the same. :)<br /><br />Just kidding. The voice is great in this one.<br /><br />Good story, Ant.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7475969042192089612.post-2316781028370798632010-07-16T00:50:25.554-04:002010-07-16T00:50:25.554-04:00Good one. This pretty much sums men up.Good one. This pretty much sums men up.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.com